How ‘duh’ moments undercut a writer’s (and readers’) ‘ah-ha’ moments
Well-intended authors can gunk up their prose with repetition, rather than letting the context do the heavy lifting. Consider these examples.
Here’s a little story:
Bert and Harry are out on the course. Bert gets out of the cart, reaches into his bag, pulls out a club, walks up to his ball and hits it straight and far. Harry says, “Hey, Bert, nice shot.”
Is there any doubt what Bert and Harry are doing? Probably not.
Still, you might see that same episode depicted this way:
Bert and Harry are out on the golf course. Bert gets out of the golf cart, reaches into his golf bag, pulls out a golf club, walks up to his golf ball and hits it straight and far. Harry says, “Hey, Bert, nice golf shot.”
Six mentions of the word “golf.” Maybe the first is helpful; the other five definitely are not.
Word counts are like golf scores: The lower the number, the more effective your game is.
Imagine now that you’re writing a blog post about social media marketing. How often must you repeat the phrase “social media marketing” to make your point? Not often, I assure you.
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