Edit the editor: How would you correct these sentences?

So, I thought I would call on the collective experience of Ragan.com readers. How would you fix the following sentences? I’m sharing what I did with them; do you agree? What would you have done?

1. But having a discussion on end-of-life issues could well be the most important discussion you, as a physician, ever have with your patient; helping them through this process allows your patient to think about exactly what they would want done “if …” Inevitably, “if” will happen to everyone.

As a physician, some of the most important discussions you have with your patients may be about end-of-life issues. Helping patients through this process allows them to think about what they want done “if . . .” Inevitably, “if” will happen to everyone.

2. If known in advance, the physician should discuss their concerns with the patient and offer to transfer their care to another physician who is willing to carry out their wishes.

If known in advance, the physician can discuss his or her concerns with the patient and offer to transfer the patient’s care to another physician who is willing to carry out the patient’s wishes.